Welcome to this Room 11 blog. Our learning philosophy is to LEARN, CREATE an artifact that shows our learning, and then SHARE it in creative ways, including posting it here on this blog.The purpose of this blog is for students to become accustomed to sharing their learning, recieving feedback, and preparing them for having their very own blog.While students will make every effort to have work corrected and error free it is in fact authentic student work, showing where students are at, and so there are likely to be some mistakes. The aim is to note progress and improvement, and we expect to see this over time.

Monday 3 June 2013

THE STORY OF RELISH

THE STORY OF RELISH
By Nicholas (Room11)

One day there was an awesome teacher named Mr Corllet who had a pet cockatiel named Beaky.
 One day his class saw a rainbow lorikeet eating the scraps on the ground. “It likes me” said Manawa “let’s ask Mr Corllet if we can keep it as another class pet!” said Jasmine. So that’s what they did.
 “It might already be someone’s pet” said Mr Corllet “Let’s ask Mr camble if we can.” So that’s exactly what they did.
 “I’ll call the vet” said Mr camble “it might already belong to someone.” So that’s exactly what he did. “Ms Lawrence doesn’t want it any more” said Lilly “you can keep it.” “Yay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!” said the children. So Mr corllet put him in a cage with some wet mix, water, and food.
 That’s the story of how  relish came to room11
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  1. Mr Corlett3 June 2013 at 22:26

    Hi! Nicholas ..... I liked the bit about the teacher :-) . Your next step is to have another look at punctuation. When you split speech you need to have a capital for each part. eg "Help!" cried John, "Is anyone there who can help me?"
    I think you did well using speech marks.
    Mr Corlett

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