Welcome to this Room 11 blog. Our learning philosophy is to LEARN, CREATE an artifact that shows our learning, and then SHARE it in creative ways, including posting it here on this blog.The purpose of this blog is for students to become accustomed to sharing their learning, recieving feedback, and preparing them for having their very own blog.While students will make every effort to have work corrected and error free it is in fact authentic student work, showing where students are at, and so there are likely to be some mistakes. The aim is to note progress and improvement, and we expect to see this over time.

Monday 3 June 2013

it was july 12th  12'o clock as two teames were preparing to go head to head with paitball guns
duncans team was to stay in the ort then bang the round had started the other tam had aredy attaced so duncan sent out 2 patrols first patrol was to take the sniper trail
second patrol was to take the first trail
but then gashes then........ i could see the class room it had been a day dream
now for the blog i think ill right about a paintball aventer
 now wre should i start well it was july 12th 12 'o clock...........by duncan
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  1. Mr Corlett3 June 2013 at 22:32

    Hi! Duncan,
    Your circular story made me smile.... it shows a sophisticated idea and a great technique to add interest. Well done! Your next step is to do more proof reading before posting it. If you do it in Google Docs it will signal when there is a spelling error such as "withpaitball" because there will be a wiggly red line.
    I liked the way you conveyed a lot of meaning with a small number of words.

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