Waikanae library
On monday the 1st of July are class and room 18’s class went down to the waikanae library to see queenie Rikihana who was going to tell us a story’s. The story that she told us was called kapuwai the monster.
After the story we got to make a clock that had a drawing and a wish/dream. Then we put it on a panel where all the other kid’s put theirs.
When we were done we got to take photo’s and look around at the other people’s artwork they had done on the clock. some people had their library card’s but other people didn't, i didn't bring my.
Dear Sam,
ReplyDeleteYou have the beginnings of a story - it needs loads more content. You can add adjectives,to give better descriptions and you can add additional details.
Also, how about asking a buddy to check through your story before you post it ... as you have a lot of errors.
Regards,
Mr Corlett.