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Monday 29 July 2013



Quake rattles kapiti coast
Hi I’m Jasmine and I’m going to tell you about the earthquake in New Zealand.
On Sunday at 4:37 there was an earthquake in New Zealand, the earthquake was a 6.5 amazing shocking earthquake. So far there have been 1900 aftershocks.  Did you know that the biggest earthquake in New Zealand is an 8.2 in the wairapa in 1855.
5 minutes before the earthquake jasmine and her friends Kelsey and jassmine and her sisters were at the BMX track for a bike around, when the earthquake struck jassmine was screaming “I can’t get up the hill HELP ME”, “ha ha ha “laughed Jasmine “ but then Jasmine realized it was an earthquake so went over to jassmine with Kelsey to help jassmine , as Jasmine walked over to jassmine she looked around and saw that all the poles were moving and the ground was shacking , jasmine was shocked. So she got jassmine and then her friend Kelsey said “let’s go home” and jasmine said “okay then “.
As the children went home they chattered about the earthquake and imagined things like if the pole was going to fall down. As they talked it started to get dark but they were soon home so that was good and the children had an amazing story to tell to their parents.
Thank you for reading this story and hopefully there will not be a worst earthquake.

By Jasmine
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2 comments:

  1. Anonymous29 July 2013 at 16:50

    I LIKE THE WAY YOU SAID ABOUT THE WAIRAPA EARTH QUAKE YOUR STORY MIGHT BE BETTER IF YOU HAD DONE CAPITALS THE STORY WAS GREAT I REALLY LIKED IT

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  2. Mr Corlett29 July 2013 at 20:58

    Well done Liezel - I liked how you did excellent feedback for Jasmine. You made a positive comment - a suggestion - and another positive comment. Awesome.

    Jasmine, I agree with Liezel about capital letters. I thought using colour to show your paragraphing - it worked well in this story.

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