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Monday 29 July 2013

earthquake

The 6.5 Earthquake
Would you like to hear about the On Sunday the 20th of July it was a massive 6.5 magnitude earthquake,in New Zealand.
On Sunday the 20th of July there was a magnitude 6.5 earthquake hit e
hamilton to blenheim I was watching Cartoon Network. I was sitting in the chair and then the earthquake happened i got a massage in the chair it felt nice. I wanted another earthquake to happen.
The earthquake was cool, I was going to get up and fell the tv because it shaking and sounded. like the earthquake house in Te Papa.
Thank you for reading my recount on the earthquakes do you like it.  


By Joe
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3 comments:

  1. Mr Corlett29 July 2013 at 17:31

    Hi! Joe,
    I like the bold title.

    The learning goal was punctuation and capitals. You are missing your question marks. Place names need capitals Hamilton / Blenheim. You also have a full stop after "sounded" which isn't needed. Also you need another full stop in your last sentence.

    Please check your work carefully.
    I liked the bit about the massage chair

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  2. Anonymous30 July 2013 at 16:42

    Hi Joe it's Adam great job but i think you you should change the color of your title but great job.

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  3. Anonymous30 July 2013 at 16:47

    amazing story joe but PUNCTUATION!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

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