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Wednesday 11 September 2013

power letter

Seddon. Street
September 7th
Room 6

dear room 1 we are learning   to save power and we are suggesting you turn off lights and other stuff that you are not using when you aren't in the class room so that you don't waste electricity we are also doing power surveys to find out how many rooms have power on because using electricity causes global warming .
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  1. Mr Corlett15 September 2013 at 04:05

    Dear Peter,
    You have made a start on your letter. Your next step os to check the success criteria and see how you are going. For instance, do you have......
    The first paragraph telling Room 1 that you are not happy about them wasting power.
    The second paragraph needs have evidence to support your idea of them saving power.
    Your third paragraph could provide a good reason for them to want to save power.
    And the 4th paragraph could tell them what to do to save power and ask them to support you in the mission to save power.
    Your letter has some components but not enough to be convincing. You could easily add more to better meet the success criteria.
    Regards,
    Mr Corlett

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  2. Unknown19 September 2013 at 15:23

    nice work peter. but maybe could you make it longer?

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  3. Unknown19 September 2013 at 15:24

    nice work peter. but maybe could you make it longer?

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