Welcome to this Room 11 blog. Our learning philosophy is to LEARN, CREATE an artifact that shows our learning, and then SHARE it in creative ways, including posting it here on this blog.The purpose of this blog is for students to become accustomed to sharing their learning, recieving feedback, and preparing them for having their very own blog.While students will make every effort to have work corrected and error free it is in fact authentic student work, showing where students are at, and so there are likely to be some mistakes. The aim is to note progress and improvement, and we expect to see this over time.

Thursday 12 September 2013

CONOR AND NICOLAS

Room 6.
Waikanae School.
Seddon St.
Waikanae.
New Zealand.



4-12/9/2013.  
Dear Room 17,
Hi I am Nicolas and I am conor
we are writing this letter to remind you to save Electricity.  waikanae school can save more electricity
so that we can get more sports equipment.
We did a survey on power and you left your lights, the sound system, and the projector on.  
we want you to turn your lights, your sound system, and your projector off.
It will help the school save power.

Thank you for saving power.-_-

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2 comments:

  1. Mr Corlett15 September 2013 at 21:20

    Dear Nicholas and Conor. You have some good evidence to back up that they left lights on with your photos. However I think you still need to work on your proof reading. Conor, your name is a proper noun and MUST start with a capital letter. There are also missing full stops and capital letters. Have a go at fixing them. You also need to add some more convincing arguments. Where is your persuasive language. Check the chart on the board for ideas.
    Regards,
    Mr Corlett

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  2. Anonymous16 September 2013 at 16:57

    i like how you put graphs and the photo of the lights on and off. at the end dont make the face or whatever you put there.

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