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Tuesday 10 September 2013

Room 17 power saving letter by Aidan.C


                           4/09/2013
                                       room 11
                         waikanae school
                           seddon street
                            new zealand




dear room 17 you are using too much of the school's technology resources. such as computers, lights, and heaters. turn off the appliances when you are not using them, use warm clothing to keep yourself warm. Please turn off these following items at morning tea  and lunchtime projector, heater,  computers and lights if you do this you will be saving the school money and they will be able to spend that money on p.e gear and more things that the school would want. Would you want more p.e gear than more power bills? so have a little think about saving power.  
by Aidan.C and Dylan.B

                                         
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1 comment:

  1. Mr Corlett11 September 2013 at 02:04

    I like that you have given reasons for saving power. However my two "Next Steps" are a) Reduce the size of your writing to 12 or 14. This looks to be about size 24.

    b) CHECK YOUR R PUNCTUATION -basic things like a capital letter for the word Waikanae A fullstop, even one as part of a question mark, indicates the end of the sentence. So the next word MUST start with a capital letter.

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